Thursday: Heir to Murdoch empire, 22/23
between father and son 22.5/23
Photographs reveal 18/18.5
oligarchy actually 17/18.5
in command of China 18/18.5
World of learning goes digital, 26/27.5
laptop evolves from schoolbook 27.5 /27.5
Friday:
Ohio zoo animals taste freedom, then death 39/44.5
Tiger bites preserve owner 25.5/27
after owner commits suicide 26/27
Foreign performers turn away 27/27
Great Britain's doors, closed 26.5/27
Economy does not allow 23/23
artists to enter England 21.5/23
Saturday:
Tiger strikes preserve owner after death 37/38
After preserve owner dies 25/27
Tiger tastes revenge for zoo 26.5/27
Governor orders the banning of people who had been guilty of animal cruelty to have ownership of animals.
Animals Killed:
9 male lions
8 lionesses
6 black bears
3 mountain lions
2 grizzly bears
2 wolves
1 baboon
Another piece of the puzzle:
Owner left behind store-bought chicken parts, which he fed his animals, were left in the driveway not far from his body...
Biography 8.5/9
tells life 7/9
Apple's 6/9
creator 6.5/9
Sunday -
Story 1:
Brazilian surgeons 17/20.5
kill in organ removal 19.5/20,5
Story 2:
Chinese toddler twice 19/20.5
twice by van in street 19.5/20.5
Story 3:
Michele Bachmann left 20.5/20.5
by campaign manager 19.5/20.5
Story 4:
General Electric net 19/20.5
income called 'volatile' 20/20.5
Story 5:
Silence fills NBA 19.5/20.5
after bargain session 19.5/20.5
Sandy, I think I did everything right this time around.
between father and son 22.5/23
Photographs reveal 18/18.5
oligarchy actually 17/18.5
in command of China 18/18.5
World of learning goes digital, 26/27.5
laptop evolves from schoolbook 27.5 /27.5
Friday:
Ohio zoo animals taste freedom, then death 39/44.5
Tiger bites preserve owner 25.5/27
after owner commits suicide 26/27
Foreign performers turn away 27/27
Great Britain's doors, closed 26.5/27
Economy does not allow 23/23
artists to enter England 21.5/23
Saturday:
Tiger strikes preserve owner after death 37/38
After preserve owner dies 25/27
Tiger tastes revenge for zoo 26.5/27
Governor orders the banning of people who had been guilty of animal cruelty to have ownership of animals.
Animals Killed:
9 male lions
8 lionesses
6 black bears
3 mountain lions
2 grizzly bears
2 wolves
1 baboon
Another piece of the puzzle:
Owner left behind store-bought chicken parts, which he fed his animals, were left in the driveway not far from his body...
Biography 8.5/9
tells life 7/9
Apple's 6/9
creator 6.5/9
Sunday -
Story 1:
Brazilian surgeons 17/20.5
kill in organ removal 19.5/20,5
Story 2:
Chinese toddler twice 19/20.5
twice by van in street 19.5/20.5
Story 3:
Michele Bachmann left 20.5/20.5
by campaign manager 19.5/20.5
Story 4:
General Electric net 19/20.5
income called 'volatile' 20/20.5
Story 5:
Silence fills NBA 19.5/20.5
after bargain session 19.5/20.5
Sandy, I think I did everything right this time around.
Well, you've got the headline language figured out. Remember, I need each individual line count. Go to the class blog and check out the way Travis did it on his blog -- very clearly presented.
ReplyDeleteJulia,
ReplyDeleteI'm finally getting around to grading these headlines. As said earlier, you seem to have the language down, and your headlines improve as you gain experience. I think I mentioned a couple of yours in class that I thought were really good. Thanks for fixing the count thing.
A few comments on the later headlines:
Biography 8.5/9
tells life 7/9
Apple's 6/9
creator 6.5/9
Seems to be an "of" missing here, as in "life of Apple's..." Can't leave that out. Also, it states the obvious -- isn't retelling life the point of any biography? You need to find something unique and newsworthy.
Chinese toddler twice 19/20.5
twice by van in street 19.5/20.5
Huh? Wouldn't want that to show up in the paper.
Michele Bachmann left 20.5/20.5
by campaign manager 19.5/20.5
Sounds like they were a couple...also passive.
General Electric net 19/20.5
income called 'volatile' 20/20.5
Net income is one of those phrases that can't be broken between lines because it sounds very awkward.
Silence fills NBA 19.5/20.5
after bargain session 19.5/20.5
That's a good one.
I love your idea for a breakout listing the animals. Another piece of the puzzle is good as well.
Sandy